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| Kaz again 2004-08-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou'll hit me for this - another pointless review to tell you that I have updated various chapters to various stories and I beg of the Ishuzu to review once she has got over her "school's back" blues. |
| Winter's Roar 2004-07-08 ch 1,  | abuseBrilliance, pure flawless brilliance!! I love the idea this poses, and i completely love the format. The conversation flows and develops nicely, and i like the repetition of "foolish…foolish still". I must admit though that i thought the ending bit was extremely well written right up until the end. I suppose i was just dissapointed that after amazing scentences like "no matter how passionate the love nor how desperate the moon and the sun may be…So it is written. Elements cannot clash or the universe will crumble beneath us", you end with two scentences that are so, well, boring for lack of a better word. Excuse me, it is your poem for you to write however you please. I just think the rest of your poem holds a lot of power, so to end with an incomplete plain scentence is a bit of a let down. Besides the ending phrases though i loved the way this poem was expressed. It had an almost childlike innocence and persistence to it. Wonderfully written! Hats off to you once again. ~ winter |
| Isis ShadowWolf 2004-07-02 ch 1, | abuseThat's a really interesting way to look at it. I think that the sun and moon are two very powerful forces, and if they really wanted to, they could make love... maybe they do... but who really knows? |
| Nervous Neuron 2004-06-28 ch 1, | abuseNice philosophy you got going there :) Maybe they can't make love because they don't have the parts :p Sorry... I just had to add that in :) |
| Johnny B. Average 2004-06-25 ch 1, | abuseWeird. I like it. (Yeah, I changed my pen name. You like?) But I'm a sucker for polar-type stuff, so maybe it's just me. L8erz. |
| Iccess-america 2004-06-13 ch 1, anon. | abusethat was really good. I loved it hope to see more from you Iccess |
| Bob n Kazzi 2004-06-12 ch 1, | abuseI like this - but then I always did like your writing. I love the idea, it's great. Is there going to be a continuation? Is it a prologue to a story? Am I being completely stupid? - Bob: When aren't you completely stupid? - I'll pretend I didn't hear that. Loved it hun! |
| catseyeview 2004-06-11 ch 1, | abuseI love this! It reminds me of dialogues of Plato such as in the "Symposium." If you haven't read it's a must since you like this dialogue writing of Philosophy as he had. Keep writing like the greats! |
| The Canines 2004-06-11 ch 1, | abuseodd...but i like it! UNique. --Lykess "The Canines" Please R&R our story! |