Good... Needs a little work... But maybe not... If you changed it you might ruin it actually.. sorry, bit of an argument with myself... I've been in my ghost reality far too long... already faded... another wonderful piece of work...

Ooh well done this is really mysterious. I like the short stanzas. It's great. Keep up the poems! :)

hum makes you think, nice!

Nice, kinda unearthly ring to it. Really cool. Kinda like a nice version of my poem, "you."