The prologue is great! If only you'd update it to feed my curiosity... Hehe... Well, I hardly finish any stories I start, so I'm a hypocrite that way. :) Keep it up! Write on!

~PDW

This indeed has a lot of potential but you never updated. It's really too bad...because it looked good.

I don't know if your drive for this story died after you wrote the Prologue or what but you need to revive it! This has the potential to be great.

very powerful words. It has such detail that lets everyone know the meaning of the truth in reality. great work!

It's an interesting beginning. Are you planning to expand it and write more? I hope so. I am a strong believer in the light at the other end, and a strong believer in hope. But it would be very interesting to see this side of the coin. Hope you keep writing!

nice intro...really makes me wana find out more, especially from the last lines "Lily was like that, but it was her fate that betrayed her, and her love that destroyed her." this really grabbed me...can't wait for the next chapter...i'm sure it will be a very interesting story. lots of love ~AllyCred~

very cool. I like the beginning [I spelled that wrong, didn't I?] and the end especially.

a great beginning, wonderfully wording...very intriguing. cant wait for the next chapter!

Nice beginning. You were able to put a lot of info in a short piece. Good work, keep writing.
**Slave**
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