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| MelodySkyes 2007-10-24 ch 1,   | I'm usually not a huge fan of short stories, since I am such a fast reader that it takes me thirty seconds to read a paragraph. However, this story has caught my attention. You have a really well written story going here and it seems to be on the longer side, from looking at your other stories that are shorter. Keep it up if you can, it has got my intrigue. However, I do know about those fickly writing moods that come and go at times and characters who, for some reason, just don't like to listen! This story is sweet, simple and short- which I like. Great job. |
| lordelfy 2006-02-13 ch 7, | good story so far, cant wait to read more |
| Crossing the Rubicon 2004-08-12 ch 6, | Interesting story so far. For some reason, Damian seems a little off to me in some of the things he says. I'm probably just being delusional. |
| HannahMarie*Willow 2004-07-23 ch 6, | Hey, good story, ok so i was wrong about the names...just one thing- how did they know the baby was gunna b a girl? They never 4t up a boys name & @ th@ time they didnt have ultrasound... |
| HannahMarie*Willow 2004-07-21 ch 1, | gr8 start but Bunny and Damien dont relli sound like 17th century names 2 me, mayb they r, i dunno |
| Angelic Hellraiser 2004-07-06 ch 2, | I like the atmosphere here. It's very eerie yet cheerful. Sorry I can't read more right now, got major summer homework. Be back when I got time! |
| Damian 2004-06-25 ch 4, | I really love your story it is excellent. It caused tears to form in my eyes... |
| Angelic Hellraiser 2004-06-14 ch 1, | Interesting start. Although you could be alittle more descriptive. I love the name Bunny! What time period is this or are you going to put that in a later chapter? Oh well, KEEP GOING! It's good! |
| AKP 2004-06-13 ch 1, | I realize this is only the first chapter, and that is why I'm going to mention these things now- so that you can think them over and change them as you see fit. This is just me, but I found it difficult to concentrate on the story when she was drinking "lemonade" in the 16oos. Did they have lemonade back then? You may want to verify it. Also, would their names be acceptable? I don't even know if the word "bunny" was used then. You may want to check it out on the Oxford English Dictionary online. It should give you chronologies for word derivations, etc. good luck with this! |