powerful use of imagery. I like your rhythm too

It was an interesting poem, but a few things I must say. God did protect His people in war. He first rescued the Israelites from Egypt and led them across the desert. Whenever the Israelites went to war, God protected them and made their enemies weak. God is always helping us; we just don't recognize it as His work. Also, God doesn’t want to interfere with our lives because He wants our feelings to be true. He wants us to love others because we want to, not because he made us. He doesn’t want the world to be fake and unreal. How would you like it if your parents only loved you because they were forced to? Anyway, I still think the poem is a nice poem. What I just said was not an attempt to change your religion and your beliefs; I just wanted to inform you on my beliefs. Keep writing!