You are an amaing writer. I love this story and can't wait for more. I like how you "recreated" the mythic creatures to weave a spellbinding story, even if it is only two chapters at the moment. The only problem I have is that it is hard to follow. But I shant worry 'bout that, some storyies are like that, opening like a blossom. Well, no's that dreaded time where the reader waits in eager silence for the next chapter. ~Tamwyn

Good, but everyday stuff. No sleeping now. It's a no,no. Keep working. Man is a thinking reed. but his great works are done when he or she is not calculating the thinking to write. Childlikeniess has to be restored with long years of writing to feel the heart. Never forgot humans think yet we don't think. Double rings around a blue moon. Watch, listen and write. Myth can be real. Nothing is really as you think it is.

Hey this is pretty good i like it please continue soon

I love the idea behind this story. One problem though...I'm really confused. I was able to understand the first chappie pretty well, but the second one was really confusing (there were a LOT of names). I really like your idea though and I hope that you keep writing.
-SciFiGeek