WOWzie! I must say that I really enjoyed this one! Good work.

mixed feelings and thought right? between concious and insane. i totally agree! i think that all human beings are like that and i really lurv that trait. ;)

I like how this was written. :D Keep writing!

I like the message, its very good. The way you conveyed your idea was good. One problem, and I mean this as constrcutive critisism, your rhythm is chopy...the poem doesn't flow together like a symphony...poems should flow. That's all I have to say. Overall, good job.

i really dont know what else to say except for its a pretty good poem...

Wow! Very nicely written! I think the first three lines are a bit cliched, and when you read, you expect the rest of the poem to be that way, but it isn't. Still, I think the expressions in the first couple of lines are too over used, and could be changed. BFP P.S. I'm putting it into my faves!

it's great! i like it!

this was a really nice poem! i like the lines and the way they are set out!
lani

That is so good. The way you led it on until the end, how you made exist and oblivious together... I love it. This was really really good, I enjoyed it.