Overall, I liked it; you paint your various characters with just the right amount of detail, making them seem real without overdoing it. My biggest qualm is that the plot sort of wanders, much like the zig-zagging bus route; there's little connectivity of the events, as characters enter and exit without much of a lasting effect, and then the conclusion seems a little pat-- this is merely my opinion. Perhaps it only seems that way because the narrator stops actively participating in events about halfway through the story. Anyway, I like your style and your attention to detail, and I'm definitely going to read some of your other work.