Simply awesome. There was the formatting problem with lack of stanzas, but oh well. This was still super fantastic. And thank you for the kind reviews of my work. Keep 'em coming. ;-)

Whoa. That was good. It was powerful and really expressive. I disagree with the ppl who didn't like the format. It's good, it suits th poem. :)

another wonderful poem! i disagree with simpleplan13, cause personally, i love the format. again, great rhyme, and i thought your metaphors were really good too

Beautifully written and so expressive! I love it, oh yes I do. It rhymes so perfectly and it's so pleasant to read.
I wish it was longer, oh well. It's so pretty.
The form isn't quite poetry form, but I'm not going to nag, because I know so well the crappiness of 80% of the writing tools out there.
So lovely...

I liek it.. especially that last line... great job! i dont relaly like the format though