That was a lot better then the first chapter it was very descriptive and you changed the formating yay!

W*F

Hiya, good story you are very talented wrtier.. A lot of the story made sense which was a good thing because a lot of fics i have read haven't really made sense. Now one thing i would change in this fic is your format between every little paragraph you put a space. I know that is not the format they use in books but on web pages it makes it a lot easier to read..and doing so makes your chapter longer...thats one reason i like it lol. Another thing thawt ws messed up was your dialouge, how you describe everythign was magnificnat, but like in the part of the audiance with the cat that just didn't seem like stuff they would say with everythign else going on. Do you get what i a saying? Well great story i thought it was really good it just needs some work i will keep on reading this you are so going into my faves. Well B~bye
~*Me
P.S can you please read my ficcy?