Aww I liked this story. I'm always happy when I find good, realistic slash which is not about high school kids and which is not full of clichés. We need more of that. It's also nice when a fic makes you both laugh and cry. I enjoy that.
I think the end was appropriate and further chapters are not necessarily needed: We meet people, fall in love, lose them and move on. That's life :(

So is this over? XP It's good whether it's over or not and I'll have to check if you really disappeared off the face of the earth or if you're still writing. I like your style.

*smiles*

Hey! I found the link on LiveJournal (Thanks to you and Kita knowing one another) and decided to read some of your stuff - you rock! This was a touching story, very touching. Naturally, like most people with a heart, I was hoping that Adrian would speed off and catch Snap when school closed, but it makes the story much more REAL to have it end the way you did. Like all good short stories, yours leaves readers thirsting for more. Good job!

Hey good story... I hope its not the end...

Clusterfuck is my new favorite word, thanks!

My all-time favorite line: “If Ryan was reading my aura, mine was more flaming than his cartoony shirt.”

I absolutely loved the allusions, especially this one: "Then it hit me, with all the grace of Tonya Harding smiting Nancy Kerrigan, and I started laughing too"

I actually started laughing too! This is great; I also really liked the end, what with the #8, t'was coordinated very well.

I like Adrian. He reminds me of someone I know.

Good story. Bad twist. Poor guys. Back together ever?

Is there going to be another chapter?

Please update soon if so.

I like your writing style. It has a really nice easy flow, your characters are vivid.

A bit of constructive criticism, I find the pacing of the story a bit off, it moves very quickly.

Try and throw in a few more scenes, expand their relationship, it may help slow things down.

Get the next chapter up quickly please, I want an update.

aw, I like the first chapter. I was really surprised when I saw there was a second one. The second is great, sounds like it's turning out to be a full blown romance. -grin- I'll keep reading if you keep writing. I like Ryan. Just thought I'd mention it.

Oh, I really like this. I like your sense of humor and your characterization is really effortless. Update!

What? Rowan's gone? That was more than unexpected. I'm glad Paul and Christine aren't around to cause any more trouble, but I'm kind of, uh, curious about Ryan's motives.

You really know how to pull off social humour. You don't overdo it though. A lot of 'young women's fiction' authors (for lack of a better term) pull off the humour part nicely, but fail to imbue the characters with any sense of believability, whereas with Adrian I still feel a lot of empathy and could easily believe he existed.

nice, that was great, i enjoyed reading it, you did a great job.

It's sweet AND liberal!

I'm in love!

Nicely done, and I especially like the little (well done) pop culture references, used not unthinkingly but with regard to the humerous possibilities.

Now, to escape from the semi-syllable words I just uttered-er, wrote-e! I like this much!

so very cute! how come you don't write more stories? this one was way too cute!