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| Sasha Mitchell 2005-02-02 ch 16,   | I was partially correct. It was B-Dog's (pronounced: buh-doggz) gay assistant! Raymond may have planned it, but he was aided. Oh and another thing. In a pathetic attempt to steal the hearts of many under-aged girls, one thing can definately be counted on...your ego. "Dear Ashley,...I will reward you with a life of adventure and excitement...We WILL meet again, Cowgirl!" Hahaha(long pause)ROTFL LMAO. Cheesy. Very cheesy bro. Conclusion Rating: 1 out of 5 Kickboxer films (featured Jean-Calude Van Damme). |
| Sasha Mitchell 2005-02-01 ch 14, | Ha, I bet you're googly-eyed and giggling like a little girl that I actually read your damn story. Alright, I just finished reading Chapter 14. So I guess it's time for me to guess whodunnit. C'mon people, let me see a show of hands...really whogivesaphuck? I believe it was Anna. She has immediate access to the safe. As to why she wanted the gum, maybe it was for her daughter? She took the trash out around closing time. Those trash bags were probably filled with the loot. The lights turning off was just icing on the cake. Zees had already been "thieved". Oh my bad, *Spoilers*Now time to finish reading the story. Here's my rating: 4 out of 5 Pacers (Don't have to fight back. Here's a soda Artest, fight back!) |
| Tullia 2004-11-22 ch 16, | Nice "whodunnit" story. Eventhough I had a sneaking suspicion it was an since Chap 14. Ohter than thet, great story |
| x0x-Still-Alive-x0x 2004-07-12 ch 16, | That was a really cool story and by the way i was right! =) Keep writing! By the way i love mystery stories like these! ~~*Nid*~~ |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-21 ch 16, | BAHAHAHAHA! I WIN! and i'm very proud of you. you finished the story. that means that you will not be grilled. SEQUEL? *hinthint* this raymond guys seems very attractive. haha, me and my love for fictional characters. uh-huh, so they'd better get together cuz otherwise this story just doesn't cut it (though i'm already in love with it...) you should consider making it longer...or adding a...SEQUEL! |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-21 ch 15, | hmm? was it really lydia?? i refuse to believe this. i am going to be a snotty little kid. I'M RIGHT! |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-21 ch 14, | i think it was anna *gives her suspiciuous glances* bathroom? uh-uh...man, NO WAY. dude, i dno, maybe this story is too twisted for me to guess, but she is my suspect. let's see...you'd better finish soon. i'm running out of chapters! |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-21 ch 12, | *raises eyebrow in confusion* what? THIS IS SO NOT COOL! that's bizzare. break in without any sign. and they were all sitting in there. *ready for more* i'm really glad there's no murder. |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-21 ch 11, | she's a naughty girl! *grins* otherwise there would be no story, huh? yes. kudos for making her disobey her boss. |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-21 ch 10, | i'm really glad that you're already 6 chapters ahead of where i am right now...otherwise *i* would have to grill *you* to make sure you kept writing. thanks for the reviews! much appreciated! yes...now to finish this story and grill you when i realize you're not done writing it yet. *raises an eyebrow* dont' make me! |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-19 ch 9, | heh, 23 cents. i have to go driving...but i'll finish this as soon as i get back. i really like it. |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-19 ch 8, | i don't like jerry or leonard. they seem like really snobby guys. IT'S LEONARD, ISN'T IT? actually, don't tell me. i really like how you worked this out. the whole explination and the weird catches. very good. gr, i still don't like jerry. *stabs him* |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-19 ch 6, | this is crazy...AND CATCHY. i've always thought it great when the robber/whatever writes a note that says something like "going to steal all your cash...and some cheese" or some weird tag on like that. good stuff. |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-19 ch 4, | *raises an eyebrow* do i smell i romance in the air? this could get interesting... i like the way a lot of the story is dialogue. it moves really fast and gives you a good, indirect insight on the characters. |
| Angelic Lucifer 2004-06-19 ch 2, | it is kind of confusing keeping up with the different character names, but i'm sure that's just becuase it's not that far into the story yet...*must keep reading* |