Simply beautiful, and also a bit frightening. I now have pictures in my head which are not so pleasant, but I love this poem, it's wonderful.

This poem is really beautiful, and you should be very proud of it. The messages are so strong and meaningful, and I love how you said them in only a few words. Great work!

Oh goodness, I'm so happy I came over here from your homepage at ff.net. Epiphanies, this is gorgeous. The meaning is so strong. And everything ties together. I love you.

That was so beautiful. You talked about this poem not rhyming (gah, or however you spell that word), but I think poetry is better without the rhyme. And if this poem is any example, you should make everything you write rhyme-less and grammar-less. I liked the ending. You are right to be proud of this piece.
>.< Sakiko

Beautiful messages, you have a great reason to be proud of this piece.
-Amber
ps: beautiful work.