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| Renzie 2005-09-05 ch 1,  | abuseXD HAHAHAHAHA. This story is WONDERFUL. I can't believe it doesn't have more reviews! I loved how John was having this internal battle of 'Why does it have to be THAT arm?!' Also, the end leaves you with a big great smile. :) < 3 Great job! Your writing is fantastic! |
| JD Kennedy 2004-07-19 ch 1, | abuseVery good, the character John would rather loose his arm than shove his girlfriend off his arm! Very funny indeed. Loved this metaphor: "With all the grace of a worm on cement after a rainstorm," As you (probaly) know I'm a fan of metaphor and it was great to see a writer use one, I don't see a lot of that, but it could just be me being too lazy too look. Sorry for not reviewing more of your stuff sooner, but my pc is busted and I seldom get internet access. Anyway this is a nice little story - more of an anecdote to what can be a larger story but good nonetheless. ~ JD |
| Tk.T 2004-07-14 ch 1, | abuseHilarious. Very funny. It covered a topic I never thought about before. I didn't think it hurt when girls slept on the guy's arm...how strange. Happy writing! Tk.T~ |
| Perilous Escapist 2004-06-19 ch 1, | abuseO.O Okay...that was a very weird story, with an exceptionally odd ending...I liked it though! Great job, keep writing! |
| Ena 2004-06-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseHahahahaha! That made my day! That was so funny!! |
| Nina Bruja 2004-06-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is really cute. I honestly couldn't find anything to criticize about it. You've got a good vocabulary, you know how to use commas and punctuation, you can spell, lol. This was just lovely. Great job. |
| Jave Harron 2004-06-19 ch 1, anon. | abusePretty darn funny! Keep this up. You're quite good at twists at the end. |