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| Kaminari 2004-07-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseyo! i really like this, and i usually hate angst.. |
| Anna 2004-07-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseWell now. That is a bitter story. It is wonderful. I really liked how the characters were pretty true to, at least how I think of them, drugged up junkies. I could see the carelessness of wretched and beautiful junkies in how they acted. And I love how it was written. The first-person point of view gave it the extra kick. I'd like to have seen more go on. I thought it was going to be longer, but this is how the ideas worked out. It's gorgeous all the same. |
| kitty 2004-07-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseI liked the story, it was a pleasent interruption to your continual tone in most of your other works. ..Okay, maybe pleasent isn't a good word to describe it. But the main thing you conquered in the story was the voice. The whole thing was voiced perfectly, and not at all in your jargon or style. Even how blunt and obscene the sudden ending was went right into the story telling. If you'd used a less strong character but had incorporated more image or other dragged it out more poetically I'd have reacted differently. The way you molded the entire narration, and therefore the entire story, made me TRUELY think you're really kinda ** up. -So effective. I'm glad you let me read it. -kitty |
| David 2004-06-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseI thought it was very good. Write more. |
| Slim 2004-06-28 ch 1,  | abuseI continue to be mesmerized by this. Wonderfully-written and captivating. You should write more stories like this one. Yes. |
| Taylah 2004-06-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseOh. My. God. That was amazing. Eddie told me about it, and, wow, amazing. |
| Britani. G. Simone 2004-06-21 ch 1, | abuseThat was brilliant. It kind of reminds me of "Junk" by Melvin Burgess. Anyway, it's really good and I'm very impressed by the way you made it seem really real! Maybe you could use the characters from here and do a much longer story? That would be really good! |
| eddie 2004-06-20 ch 1, anon. | abusewow, that was truly intense. i have never had such a strong experience from a short story. i would also like to know how you were inspired. |
| Rob 2004-06-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseWell... I'm not good at reviewing things but... It was good. Creepy, but good. Poe2K4. Just stay away from me ;P |
| jackie 2004-06-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseholy **, that kicked so much ** **..what inspired that may i ask? i didnt know you could write like that...yy are god |