nicely done. so relatable. keep writing!

tuesday

I like this poem a lot, but the only part that bothers me is what I suppose someone else has pointed out, but I'm sure in Stanza 2, Line 3 you meant "this" and not "these". But still, the feeling is mutual. A lot of people seem to feel and think like this.

the poem suggests hospitality by the persona. but the one to whom it's addressed to seemed to be departing/drifting. i like the irony felt by both. ang ganda ng poem. maraming ganyan. haha..

A very cute poem, it envokes a sense of familiarity in me. I can only assume this is because everyone has had similar dreams and fantasies at one point in their life; great job in capturing that emotion is words!

nice one, but i think maybe you use the dotdotdots a bit too much. it's pretty evident in your reviews as well. maybe you could expermiment with punctuation a bit. but other than that, good job.

I can relate to this a lot, because of the fantasies part. It's like falling in love with a complete stranger, yet it's so beautiful, so beautiful. The punctuation of the constant ...'s reflect the surreal quality of this whole poem.

Thank you for the review. Though what you said in it was truly an accusation and I do not appreciate it. For one thing, I've never even come across you or your work before. I thought of my pen name myself using a dictionary... And that poem (as well as the format) was a required piece for an English class. Nothing was derived from you. So just to give you a forewarning, if you think I "copied" your work or what not like I (and many others) sense from your review, then you need to really get your priorities straight. For a future reference, if you want to accuse someone who doesn't even know your very existance then why don't you first present the facts in a nice manner and talk it out with them.

Very nice. And beautiful. I agree, originality...

well done, i liked it a lot.i like the intro line to every verse and how it trails off at the end. great poem, and well written. keep writing!

ohh i like it! i especially liked how you ended it. it was perfect.

i think the 3rd verse is d best but d poem as a hole is pretty amazing... i like the hole hello stranger thing its flirty yet distant.
well done!
has an unworldy beauty hovering around it and is drenched in originality!
much love xx
cud u please check out my story: thats not how it happened. please! it wud mean alot to me. thanks...

sometimes i feel this way too.
a guy dats just there..
in my dream...

the syntax in this poem really emphasises what you want to say: how the elipses leave the reader with a lingering sensation. most of us know the feeling of having memories of a person still whispering in parts of our mind - and this work really strikes that chord. excellent work.

...another good poem...must've been an interesting dream, eh?... well this poem explains alot bout how this stranger was once someone special... someone special indeed...

I like this one. I'm not usually into the romance kind, but this one's ok. It's familiar though... I don't know why.