Great job! This is an excellent story. Fast paced too! Keep up the Good Work!

KEEP GOING!

Hey, thanks 4 leaving me a review. I like this story, i really like Mercy, she has a very kick-butt demeanor, i also like the way you explain all the action. It moves at a fast pace but its easy to keep track of making it very interesting and exciting to read. You might like 2 try a different format tho cuz it cn get confusing. Plz keep goin!

Hmm...I like it! The only thing you could do a bit better is the formatting so it is a bit easier to read. If you have word, save it as a web page, which would put it in html style and then the paragraphs will be split, making readin easier. Then it won't be a hug block of text. Other than that, you have a great writing style. Keep it up!