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slave to the voices 2004-06-23 . chapter 1
The only problem I found is that this needs to be split up into several paragraphs. There should be a separate paragraph for each person speaking. Other than that, I think this is a good start for what could be a great story. Nice work, keep writing.
**Slave**
PS. Sorry it took so long to get to read your work, I've been incredibly busy. And thanks for your kind review of "Mother".
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