Really enjoyed reading this, you have a great concept here and with your obvious humour it adds to quite a story. However there are a few things which let the story down, I don't have enough room here to say it all but if you want to email me I can tell you but some of it is that there are a few weak spots in characters, a few details I wouldn't expect people to know but don't get down. Like I said the potential is here, trust me ;)

Hmm very interesting story. I love the subtle sarcasim. It's great. Keep writing you have my curiousity.

Hi!!
I'm loving this story, I was wandering if there will be another chapter?
ALSO!
Can I have your permission to use this story in my Coursework aat college? It's got Copyright stuff on the bottom so when it's used and stuck in my book ect, you'll get loads of credit... ^_^
Just I can't write to save my life and I need a stroy for my art course... E-mail me if it's a yes or no please... *hugs*
Lilith Black...X

Yay! *Applauds the happy dancey yay ficcage* Great story! Jayce's character amuses me... He's very... I dunno. Easy-going or something. Whatever, he entertains me (as does the word "cad"... My new insult!). ^.^ Great job! Update soon!
~Neph