|Reviews for It Hurts When I Breathe In|
| Dreu 7/5/04 . chapter 1
Very nice, I like it.
| Audrey Portman 6/24/04 . chapter 1
great; i always love your work. i really like the rhyming and how you got your point across.
| Eirien 6/24/04 . chapter 1
Wonderful. The rhymes and repetitions work extremely well, making it almost sound like a magical incantation or something of that kind. I love the way this can be interpreted on so many levels, the breathing in/ out can be be taken literally, but symbolically as well. The change from breathing in to breathing out in the last line is awitty ending. I love this poem.
| MovingLife 6/23/04 . chapter 1
I like the repetition. I'm not usually a big fan of poems with a repeating line to such an extent, but this refrain is an exception... I can't tell you why, I don't know! The alliteration and rhythm of the last line ("But breathing out will bring release") makes it very effective.
| Princess-anna57 6/23/04 . chapter 1
Hehe! I like this one! It has a simple structure, but it is very powerful! Loving it here!
PS: Thanks for reviewing my work.