Very nice, I like it.

great; i always love your work. i really like the rhyming and how you got your point across.

Wonderful. The rhymes and repetitions work extremely well, making it almost sound like a magical incantation or something of that kind. I love the way this can be interpreted on so many levels, the breathing in/ out can be be taken literally, but symbolically as well. The change from breathing in to breathing out in the last line is awitty ending. I love this poem.

I like the repetition. I'm not usually a big fan of poems with a repeating line to such an extent, but this refrain is an exception... I can't tell you why, I don't know! The alliteration and rhythm of the last line ("But breathing out will bring release") makes it very effective.

Hehe! I like this one! It has a simple structure, but it is very powerful! Loving it here!
-Anna.
PS: Thanks for reviewing my work.