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| Blue Abyss 2004-08-08 ch 1,  | abuseI like your stuff. |
| slain-angel 2004-06-23 ch 1, | abuseI love it. It's short, but it says so much. The only thing I would have done different is change the second line a bit so that it doesn't say "Take the"... it's a little repetative without being a common theme to the piece... maybe something like "Loosen the strings" instead? Anyhow, I really like it. |