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| Laura 2004-10-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseHello, this is me, from dA. I can kinda relate 2 this poem, i like it cos of the repetition. |
| High Sorceress Zeia 2004-07-09 ch 1,  | abuseo.o;; How morbid, Britt-chan. XD But I like it. |
| Baka B.M 2004-07-07 ch 1, | abuse*hugs* Beautiful poem, Nath ^^ I like how the words are short and sharp, like the razor. The words are harsh and then followed by a softer tone and it just brings a lot of emotion to the piece. The repeative style is strong and it really makes you take notice of the words. Wondeful poem, Britt. The best I've seen. |
| fiddler jones 2004-07-07 ch 1, | abusewhoa... |
| Eirien 2004-06-24 ch 1, | abuseThese aren't really haikus, so maybe you should put it in a different category, but the poem itself is really good. Very effective with the repetitions, the short lines, the staccato-like rhythm and the rhymes. It's a good idea to address the razor directly, personifying it as a means of release the speaker appeals to. My favourite line is "You're my shout", this is so true, SH often being what I have called "silent cries" in my poetry on the subject. |
| Mitsunaga 2004-06-23 ch 1, | abuseNot exactly a haiku...Not exactly my type of poetry...not exactly my type of suicide...seppuku the way to die honorably and to let you know you have a friend to end the pain by chopping your head off...bushido=good stuff |
| Raven A. Star 2004-06-23 ch 1, | abuseoh my god...Please say you're not doing that. But that was an excellent poem. |
| fanigoes2hollywood 2004-06-23 ch 1, | abuseI love it, the repetatism, the emotions used.i reely loved it.def one for the favorites! |
| Tala and Stephy 2004-06-23 ch 1, | abuseWANG! Anyways, it sort of creeps me out. Just the fact that someone would self-mutilate themselves. Overall, it was a good poem. Emotional, and creepy, yes, but still, it had a lot of talent in this poem. Good work, Britt. ^_^ |