Oh wow.
I didn't really expect you to write another chapter. I'm really sorry that it seemed rude, but I could find no other way to make what I thought clear. See, I wouldn't have said it if I'd known there was a chapter after. Of course, there wasn't going to be, and I love that you agreed with me instead of taking the review as a flame. It really wasn't. I was just voicing my opinion. I really did love the chapter.
As for this chapter.. Well.. It was hard for me to enjoy it with the guilt of being rude at te back of my head, but it was very good. I could finally see why she'd try to commit suicide. It had seemed like there was no reason. And we can see how her life would progress. Kind of, at least. Very good. :)
Alright, again, I'm very sorry I came off as rude.
Ciao :)

That was cute. I saw you didn't have many reviews, and I was sad, so I reviewed! Bleh, someone said it was pointless? I don't think it was pointless...whoever said that has never been depressed.
Darkdreams

Although I wish you could've written more, it was an engaging story. Elaine and Judas are both well fleshed out characters, with a defined relationship, and I like the central theme that we all have to take responsibility for our actions, or else nothing ends up mattering. In a way, it is self-contained, but seeing the events leading up to it, I think, might make it even better. Excellent stuff overall!

To be totally honest..
I really did like it.. it's just that it had no point. I mean.. there's almost no story.. See, he saves her, right? But then what? She goes home happy? I'm sorry, I can kinda see where you're going with this.. but it seems more like a part of a series rather than a one-shot. If we see how this ends up, or how she deals with everyone, or how this started.. then I'm sure I'll love it.. but I don't think that was an ending I liked (of course, I could be dissapointed with the fact that there was no love-thing with Judas/Eliane.. but that's just me).
Keep going, though.. I'm sure with practice you'll find a story you can really go with. (I haven't read your other stories, though..).
Ciao :)

an interesting approach, i really like it. i also like how you listed it under manga (being a fan myself) it put some imagery in that it might have lacked. when you said the edge of the world though, i didn't automatically thing "building" i thought "cliff overlooking the sea on a bright day, almost white from the sun". so when you mentioned doors it left me rather dissapointed for a moment. maybe try and make the setting a little more clear towards the top. other than that, it was great!