Very graphic and dark, I love it. Well done.

Awesome. Good descriptions. Good ending.

awesome. luv it.

Reminds me of Armegeddon... well done... I love death yet scared of it when it arrives... Understand?

dead from fear of death? if I got that right, that's some cool irony, but I don't think I did get it quite...
zombies?
Anyway, I like the imagery of "sky drips heavily upon you". It reminds me of the myth of Atlas holding up the sky on his shoulders for all of eternity.

*Gulps and looks around* Is Death gone yet? I don't want to die at such a young age! Very good and graphic. I so couldn't have anything better myself.