Nice. :)

Wow. This is an amazingly worded poem. I love the last stanza: "And as others wept for endings/So I rejoiced for Start/And forever I will praise you/With a never-ceasing heart." And these lines: "I sobbed to you apology/You smiled and said, 'Forgiven'". I love how you've illustrated how easy God makes it for us to go back to Him, and how loving and forgiving He truly is. Just a beautiful poem all around.

*Sighs as shivers run down my spine and I add piece to my favorite* Wow! what else can I say? This piece is extremely powerful and I love it! Keep writing, and keep letting God work through you! God Bless,
~Bethy~

You've got to reach out to touch rock bottom...hehe... that's John Reuben... awesome singer. Anyway, awesome poem. so much feeling and honesty in it. I love this so much, especially the 3rd stanza. It just spoke to me. I can't think of anything else to say! Anyway, thatnk you for your reviews, and i look forward to reviewing more of your stuff!
God Bless!

Yowzah! Very nice stuff here. it has such a good spiritual message. I wish there was a way to spread this around. It's too bad that probably the people who need this the most probably wouldn't finish it. Hm. It's really good though. Keep it up though. Haha. I'll catch ya later!

Lovely and moving. It is quite long, but the topic jusitifes that and my interest was kept throughout. You use some really wonderful images, especially that strong "Acid tears, so black with hate/ Burned tunnels through my soul". The acid tears image has been used before (by me and by the band Wedding Party for instance ;-) ), but the way you expanded it is really good, that idea with the black tunnels. Great image. The gasoline image is quite violent and at first sight negative, but it works in the context of burning away the scum, much like the violent images John Donne uses in his "Batter my heart". (Btw, shouldn't it be "The only way TO rid the scum" instead of "rid the" twice?)
I love that eleventh stanza, it's absolutely touching and so true. I also like the way you start with a universal perspective, the ordering of chaos in creation and the wonder of redemption.