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| Some Weird Bloke 2004-08-25 ch 2, anon. | abuseWow, I really loved the first version of your story! I don't really think the second one was as good, but that's just me. I really loved the way you encorporated the flashbacks, and I wish you could add another chapter. But it's so perfectly finished that I wouldn't. The only thing to clear up would be who Anna was. I'm guessing it's her mother, but I'm not exactly sure. Overall though, great job! |
| slave to the voices 2004-06-28 ch 1,  | abuseI got a little confused because there is nothing to note the flashbacks. But all in all, I thought this was a very good story. It was well written and perfectly described. Nice work, keep writing. **Slave** |