Bloody AWSOME! I loved it! the rhyming scheme is genious and your choice of words are intense VERY intense...
keep it up.

Bravo...your writing is in depth and deep. I write alot like this. and I think that it is very odd that your 15, cause I'm 15 also. My name is Cassie and we liek the same things. (creepy and yet special) Please read one of my poems or my story. Also, Email me sometime. We have a lot in common.

I loved it as well. It's very... I dunno. I can't find the right word... Then again, there is no right word.

I really enjoyed this, it was very well written. You're a wonderful writer, I shall be checking out more of your work soon.

wow very dark and powerful. Well written... and you didn't think this was good? Ur nuts! lol I usually can't write depressing stuff myself, but this is really good!
~Flenda

wow! this is really good! its way more depressing than anything i could write...i have more of like a *happy vibe-ish* thing to my stuff but i still really like this!! good job!
*summer lover*

This is great, I lvoe it.

I love it especially the chorus! Great job!

I liek it... it is relaly good!! it has nice rhyming and its extremely powerful... awesome song!

the usual beauty.. love it hun

Gosh, you think this isn't good? I loved it! This rules! It's awesome. Keep writing:)
Allie

*excuse language* ** wow that ** rocks! omg... youre in my head, get out! LOL! nah but seriously, this was the best thing ive read in awhile. amazing gurl amazing.

I like the song, sounds something like evanescence meets Ghost of the Robot-ish. I'm a fan of the offbeat and different and unique, this is that. The song had a good lil flow, good chorus, love that. It's a good song, not bad at t'all.

I didn't think it was bad, I liked it, would be eager to hear it sung to a specific tune. Besides, everything you've written as stress relief will be better, because usually it's more...heartfelt (it's the best word I can come up with!)
But seriously, I really liked it.