I haven't read anything else yet, but this made me laugh. =)

This isn't that bad...its actually very interesting. Its way better then anything i could do...*sigh*...even my best work pales in comparison to...everything! Well, on to chapter two! ^_^

Hey i was goin to wait til i finished reading the story to submit a review, but its fun if i just submit one after every chapter or in this case after ur page of putting yourself down and apologizing. No need to apologize for what you named ur characters, hell i've given most my characters the stupidest names. I also know how you feel when you look back on something u wrote long ago. My first story i ever wrote turned out to be the crappest thing to ever have been typed on a computer, but i love it cuz that story was what helped me slightly improve as a writer(even though i don't even deserve to be called a writer.) Well, enough of that. Time for me to read the rest of ur story. ^_^

Though I've only read part of your story, it doesn't seem to be as bad as you make it out to be. Its not great, but its not terrible either. Since it seems as if you've been writing for a while, I was wondering if you could pre-read the chapters of a story I will be posting in about a week or so. I could e-mail it to you. I only have an outline of the story so far and I need to fill it out more. This will be my first attempt at posting a story on this site or any other. I'm also wondering whether I should wait until I completely write out the story to post it, or if I should just write a chapter and then post it and then just keep going from there. Any advice would be helpful. I was also wondering if you would like to help me form a group for writers on this site. I figure we could read and review each other's stories (It seems to be very hard to get people to review the average story.), pre-read each other's stories, or to just give advice or encouragement. Since I just came up with this idea about a few hours ago, there isn't anyone in the group yet (still waiting for a response from a few different writers), but I'm hopeful though. I think this would get other writers to read and review your stories and you could do the same for them. I hope you like this idea, but if not I hope you will at least mention this to any other writers you may know (either personally or through the net). If you wish to contact me, my address is storybored04@hotmail.com. (this is beginning to feel like spam...) Happy writing...from the fox to you.

dont put your work down!i really enjoyed what ive read so far. will read more later. keep up good work!