i rEmEmBeE dA daI u r0tE DiS uP. i wAs wAtchIn u oUt oF mAi wInd0w. u wrote dIs bUt DeN u g0t stuck. i waNTed t0 hElP y0u n l0vE y0u. BUt mAI gUrlFrIeNd wOUld hAvE g0tTeN mAd dAt i hAdN't t0lD hEr i wAS wAtcHiN j00.

i wATch j00 AlL da tYmE. i dInk j00 r HAwTdAyUm.wOUld j00 lYk t0 bE mAi ** or hO?

we cOuLd hAve hoUrs oF fuN doIn thIngs.

I can totally relate to the song being in the chic's place of course. I speak for chic's like me whin I say this, sometimes it's not always a problem with a boy but a much deeper problem that she's scared to tell you because she's afraid she'll scare you away. whew, I am done ranting now. Reading another song yea! ~love ya Kaylee~

This is good, not really my thing to read love song type stuff, but it's good. Keep it up. ^_^

I like lots. Cooliciousness

First of all, thanks for your kind words in the review. I needed it. I like this song a lot. I think you really keyed into something girls feel and I love the last stanza about how a relationship should be. I agree. Any girl would want to hear that from her boyfriend...that she has someone to lean on. *sigh* Anyways, great job. About Fictionpress: I've honestly only gotten maybe half a dozen flames in all of the time I've been on here writing. I've met so many people that are wonderful writers that have good things to say and it has really helped my writing improve. I hope you decide to come back, because I can tell already you ARE a great writer. -CZ

You are getting harder and harder to dislike. I hate what you have to say about life and its worth but its hard to hate someone who listens to GotR. Oh well. In any event I liked the song. Still unhappy with the author but the song itself wasnt bad.

me: o baby

you: please touch me there dont go!

me: touch you where?

you: (you place my hand on your dirty **)oh it smells bad but thats the way i like it uhuh uhuh i love kc and the sunshine band

you: dont stop!

me: oh stinky my playa hand is strong

you: i wanna ewat ur ** with masjked potaotoesthis aint no pimp myu rudepimp my compuiter plalank .g., .,m

I think now I'm finally caught up to reviewing you!! *YAY* who... about ur poem, i'm not gonna say too much cuz i'm dead tired, but... I love the chorus that says "IN the language of Girl" it made me laugh. My BFF and i were gonna make a Girl -> Guy dictionary and make millions, hehe. I also think a sweet line is "cuz ifu can't tell ur boy, then something's wrong." how cute!

this is great! i can just imagine the melody.
"Because nothing Has a different meaning In the language of Girl" I love those lines!! great job!

I'm not much of an expert on poetry or lyrics, but this sounds more like just a letter you'd write down on your 70 page mead notebook.
It didn't leave any room to make the song fit in the listener's situation as well.

much too literal! Why write it in a song if you're just going to say it? I have this problem also, but for your song to work, you really need to try to view things a different way; say them using images instead of saying "something's wrong! I can tell! Tell me what it is!" Bluntly put, it's simply not interesting when poems are this straightforward (again, I do have this problem as well) keep trying

Aw ;_;

I like it... Speaks the truth, excellently done

i like. the bridge especially. How did you get it to have a font? it looks very pretty! :D lovely song.

Aww this is so sweet and well written. I wish all guys could be like you, :D