Reviews for Something Better than Playing Tag

Reviews For: Something Better than Playing Tag

M.J. Perales
2004-06-28
ch 1,

I love the ending, wasn't expecting it.
Your word choice is wonderful, but there is one thing that bothers me about the poem.
House. I don't know why, but I think something that would come in contact with the castle, like "this air" or "this Earth" or "this world" instead. Your poem, your choice.
What I loved is the brevity. That is what more poems need, I think. Why use more words when you can say it in fewer. Great job here.
I liked it, I'll be checking you out more often.

swift sky silver
2004-06-28
ch 1,

hm... an interesting thought came to mind when i read this... probably has no relation to the point of your poem... other than a house burning to smitherenes. enough of my ramblings, i like the formating especially... good job =0)

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