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Kidiu Anaji 2007-07-02 ch 10,	Hee, nice story. I hope you'll take time to update someday. And if you don't, I understand.
paputsza 2006-11-21 ch 10,	I don't care if you're dieing you need to update. Stick in some smutt too. The yaoi type please. o.\\
paputsza 2006-11-21 ch 9,	Every time an elderly woman gets drunk a gay child is born. XDK
paputsza 2006-11-21 ch 7,	you must just really like knocking your character out when you don't need him. nice though.
paputsza 2006-11-20 ch 1,	This boy's an angel.
Midnights Scream 2006-06-27 ch 10,	you totally confused me by what you said I like the story, but chapt. 10 was too short bad you. anyway you should update because I like your story I'll read and review promise
Flies 2006-05-15 ch 10,	Going through my mounds of undealt with email before the summer rolled around I found the little notice this chapter had been posted. Perplexed why such a notice hadn't been attended to I searched to see I hadn't reviewed the latest chapter. This too was befuddling, so I clicked over to read the latest chapter soon to find why I didn't reply; it was simply shorter than all get out! But alas, I review anyways. The short & sweet was mildly depressing, but the descriptions you used were divine, m'dear! I love how he's lost his mind and is now talking to his alarm clock, which seems obsessed with the awesomeness of comparing Link to cheese. I think, however, when you wrote "represented itself in a more pressing manner" you meant to say something like "presented itself in a more pressing manner", though I suppose either way works (presented just sounds better to me, I'm not sure why). I hope, whenever it comes, the next chapter is longer and involves Sir Chicken clucking on over to Link. Much love;Jasmyne
Jayn 2006-04-25 ch 10,	I really like your story! I want to see them get together! PLEASE update your cool story? Puppy eyes
Basha 2006-01-20 ch 10,	Hey honey, I think this chapter is chaptery enough to be a 'chapter.' It says what it's supposed to, simple and sweet. I can't see it being longer without running the risk of rambling on (adding more scenes or conversations with himself) or having choppyness (putting the next day in the same chapter.) I understand your confusion over the whole 'represented' thing. Sadly, ‘represented’ doesn't stand-in for ‘presented again.’ Since saying "the matter presented itself again" is a little cliché and boring, you could say something like "...Or whenever the matter decided to pester me again." But because all writers are bestowed with an extra-special ability called "Writer's License," you get to create/modify any word to fit your needs. Therefore "re-presented" is completely valid. Or you might feel the need to leave the (?) as it is, to show what you were trying to say, and people will be completely understanding or they will suffer The Wrath.So to sum-up all of my babble, good job on your chapter, sweety :)
Blutiger Tod 2005-11-06 ch 10,	Yes, we shall band together to fix it! -puts a bandaid on the monitor- Err...that's not what you meant, huh? Oh well. And I feel terrible, being so infatuated with an English Masters, that I don't know if you should have done re-present. Agh. >< Anyway, I don't hate you for taking forever to update. I have major writer's block right now, too. Even slacking off in my rps! I swear it's because I don't have those notebooks...Damn you Julia! ^^ Love me! Update when you can, toodles!
Cherise 2005-10-30 ch 10,	Is he ever going to discover bisexuality? Or is he going to force himself into one main sexuality? Which is a decidedly stupid thing to do if you love men and women the same amount. Well, since you realize the pathetic state of chapter ten, I wont mention it, but please don't let the next chapter be so short, I want some Link on Ephy, man on man action!
DevilDragon of Pain 2005-10-27 ch 10,	Even though it was short, I was happy to know that you haven't given up. Damn it all though! I want you to update again...SOON! This was far too short to even come close to satisfying my need to read this story. The characters all suffer from their own amusing and wretched problems that make them individuals in the writing world. (I hope this motivates you.) SCORE: 9/10 (Only because it's so ** short!) The Critic, DevilDragon of Pain
GreenVixen 2005-10-27 ch 10,	Sighs tear tear ... it was a good chapterish thing ... maybe if u cud write a little more th enext plz well im hopin more coms soon ciao!
KatChanQ 2005-10-27 ch 10,	Damn that's some good cheese O.o ... (sorry I'm not a constructive criticism person. And it's ok it's sort, just glad to know you didn't forget the story ^_^. And I love the cheese part
Memory 2005-10-08 ch 9,	Hey, I really like your story. :3 You need to update though! XD It's so adorable, I can't wait to see how it turns out! =D Please update soon. ~

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