great job! Perfect punctuation and all that, I tend to disregard all that stuff meself so it's nice to see someone who actually IS grammatically correct :-P

The rhythm is good and the whole poem really grabs you. You have a lot of potential, keep up with the writing!Just returning the favor,-Z-

Oh my God another great poem! I think you should enter ...I think that's what it's called...and submit this! D Keep it up!

This is really prety... I was surprised that you didn't have reviews. I liked this... Keep writing and never stop.
eien,
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