Wow- I really like this. It actually feels like you're talking to someone, which is great. And the rhymes are really cool, and subtle, which is always the best.
DB

very strong, and touching.

I love this poem, it's really great! (not great happy, it's... you know what I mean!) You say in all of your summaries that your poems are "mediocre" or some word of equal implication. I don't know what you're talking about. You're good. Don't be so down on yourself about it.