| Reviews for View Of The World At Large |
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Head or Tales 7/2/04 . chapter 1I like the title you chose for that one... I really enjoyed the evolution of his life through all the poem. " They all share the same name, and they all have the same face And this one man is laughing at his calculated fall from grace " The way you ended it was just beautiful and so powerful... And how it sounded is cool ( I read it out loud ) cuz everything rhymes. I'd never be able to do that! Congratulation! Ayda ( Je pense que ça aussi, c'est très bien ) ) |
Suzanne Star 7/1/04 . chapter 1I think there are too many syllables in the 2nd line of the 2nd stanza...maybe take out "fragment"? But I like the imagery you use in regards to the man, and his life, and his inevitable destruction. :) |