I really liked how you compared the stars to human beings. I love poems that have to do anything with the stars, and I really liked yours, because I haven't seen it done anywhere before, comparing stars to humans. So, good job to that.

"Back now to that thing they call life; My path without stones, My song without lyrics,My story without hero..."

Those were by far my favorite lines. *keep writing* You have an amazing talent for it.

Britney

You know, I'm not a big fan of poems with extended star metaphors, because it's been a bit overdone.

I do like what you did, though, with the comparison to human souls (at least, that's what I interpreted it as, I could be way off...either way, I like the comparison) and the fact that the stars we see are quite possibly dead and gone. They look so alive and shining and yet...They're not really there anymore.

The more I think about this one the more I like it.

This reads as though you feel the end has arrived...It paints a very haunting picture...