First and foremost, I'd like to thank you for writing a poem that doesn't have a happy ending. In this day and age, all anyone wants to see anymore is a happy, feel-good, sugar coated half truth that doesn't reflect any truth. It's **. Your poem is inspiring and touching, and there is a strong sense of anger that kind of makes me angry too. Well done.

This is so true about what happens after something like that. It's completely honest.

WOW! That is all that I can say, right now. I wish that I knew where this came from. Did it come from a true happening? Was it something you imagined? Was it real? I am blown away.

I thought this one was amazing. Sounds like it was based on something tangible. If you want, I'll still forget about "fictionpress", but I still think your work is creative and fun to read.

this thing is telling me to give u some "constructive critism", so heres mine:

write a story on something I can relate to, or on something where I kno what your talking about.

-Krish-y