o. wow. That's wicked good. Chills, man, chills! ^_^ I hope you keep going, it's driving me crazy with suspense!
btw- have you read Steven King's On Writing? I read it over my trip to check out my school and it was so good- finished it in 2-3 days I think. Good stuff. I mean, I didn't agree with everything he said, but there was a lot of interesting stuff in that book. Okeedokee! TTUL!

*thinks* Yes, this is the kind of thing I can easily read...I can see how it got Paj a bit. Then again, I myself love to twist everything and make a character live through hell -.-; You can really feel Vanessa's pain. And in the second chapter I'm guessing the top part is Vanessa's mother still in prison?
Very interesting...I shall keep reading ^^

That's.. that's.. that's not nice T_T It's good, but it's not nice. Poor 'Nessa.