you are very good wiwth descriptions...i like the way you described a fully emotional process so physicaly

Cool! Loved the ending!
cio, hoellenwauwau

"Renaissanced girl
Holding back the past self
In the depths of her heart"
Wow. Those are my favorite lines. I love all the images and symbolism you put in your poem. And thank you so much for reviewing one of my poems. It meant so much to hear something good about my work. :-D

Interesting choice of a motif. I like how the smithing gives rise to a "renaissanced girl." The tempest is like a firestorm when the previous focus of the iron rusts and the light (fire) is released. The girl is removed from the process and yet is the central character. Very true and well structured. My biggest critique is that i really thought you were going to say "of an unsuspected self" which finally involves the character directly rather than merely put upon her. My own vagary I suppose. Well done!

Two words: VERY brilliant!

One word: brilliant.