OMG! i luv this! its so pretty!

Ah, you're so good! Once again you've written an awesome poem. Only a few minor things here and there...in my opinion you should change the "doesn't" in "and time doesn't stop flowing" to "does not". Flows better, methinks. But even so this poem rocks!-CS

I like them both, though I must say that the second version flows better. Though there are one or two minor things here and there. Like "doesn't" in "and time doesn't stop flowing" would work better as "does not". But that's just my opinion. You write how YOU want to write. Great job! ^__~

Wow!
This is so beautiful...

O_O How can you write such great stuff? I love it! Oh and sorry for not sending a response for your newest chapter yet, but I'm not very well and this is the fist time I've been alowed on and only for a few minutes so bye bye! ^^ Lovely poem! ^^

OH PRETTY!
I especially liked the first stanza!
That sounded so accerate and neat! But I loved the whole poem! It had rythm and reason and I like reason, cuz its not stupid and corny!
Loved it!
Laterz,
Stally

this is very good
everything's synchronized and the rhyme doesn't seem forced
for the third line of the first stanza i suggest that you change it to "some *find* joy and some *find* pain"
very very good.. as i've said before, lol
the only thing i think you should correct besides the line above is the second stanza.. it doesnt flow very well
it's a number of syllables kinda thing.. the second and fourth lines are too long to go with the first and third lines
maybe it would work better with just.. an adj. b4 fate and hurt? i dunno.. use your artistic license
kudos! very nice work!

Oh. Ah. I like your poem! Really good! ^-^!