I wasn't quite sure how to review this one, the rhymes flow, but they seem almost un-necessary. I like how the poem tells a story without being a narrative, and how your feelings are clearly expressed
Adrienne 2004-07-03 . chapter 1
w00t. i'm a horrible judge of poetry. can't write it, can't read it, can't understand it, can't review it. :-P Sorry if I suck. Loffs. tis good.