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Reviews For: The Great Dance
DefianceIsMe 2004-07-10 . chapter 1
I think that the rhyming scheme gives it a pouding rhythm. It's short but catchy.
OryssaV 2004-07-05 . chapter 1
I think this is a really nice poem... the first and second stanzas are very interesting although somewhat dark, touching something deeper than just dance and reality of life. Life could have been compared to a dance, could it not? And The capitalization of the word "Dance" does make it clear and pointed, as in the word means more than we usually associate dancing with. It is a nice touch in the poem.
Sometimes I get the feeling as if your lines were incomplete, like there is something missing. Usually it is the absence of a verb that makes it sound like that. As you go into the third and fourth stanzas the ending "tion" is just giving me a headache.
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