wow...ur right about the good imagery... some of the imagery is a bit creepy to me though... like how an abstract painting can be creepy... im sure there's symbolism tucked in there too...im just too sleepy to try & find it righ now. ^^;;

I liked the imagery in your poem, however, you do tend to get a bit too wordy. Try to convey the scene with as little words as possible--and give the reader some credit. The reader will know that if you're bleeding from your heart, its coming out of your chest. So, in the line "And crimson heart-blood poured from my chest" you might want to say instead something like "And crimson blood fled my heart/chest" Also, in the line, "And the old dark sky and the heart-knife wind" you have a ton of adjectives, which tend to slow down the action. Instead you might want to say something like, "And the ancient sky and the heart-knife wind." You also tend to use the word 'and' a lot, which, too, can slow the action of the piece. In all, I thought your poem was great. It really connected with me and my life. You are also really good at giving the reader an image of what this place looks like in their head--I could see where the person was in the poem. Please note that you do not have to take any of my suggestions, I'm just trying to help.
Keep writing!
-Aillil

Wow. That had amazing imagery, to the point where I could see every bit... It was very powerful, and very real.

Nice imagery there. Great poem. And that's coming from someone who usually doesn't bother with non-rhyming poems.