YES! I like it... The only thing is that this idiot that lives down my road is named Christophe. He's fat, short, and french. He spends every summer in France. But no one likes him, cuz he's weird. He got tendonitis in his thumbs from playing video games too much. Is that sad or what? It's a really great story, though, and I can't wait for more. The thing that I do when I want to organize my writing (cuz my story's getting long, and I have to keep track of what's going on...) I just write it however I want, and then I outline it so that I can refer back to it later. So I organize after I write it. If that makes any sense at all. Great Story, keep writing! I'll be waiting. ~Lady Merlin

I like you story! Update soon!

Wow, this is beautiful writing! You have great description. My favorite part of any story. ^.^ You are a wonderful writer, keep at it! ~Lady Merlin

pretty cool beginning. you're right; it wouldn't have worked as a one shot. i'm curious to see where you'll take this, and just how well you'll be able to write in the meeting. =) nice start
~k8

I liked it a lot and think you should continue with it! You are very good a describing things but still leaving a little to the imagination.
**Keep Writing**
Gemini kelly