Nice writing but u keep swithcing from guy to girl in the same stanza, try to make new ones when u switch... i got lost on this one too...

happy?iam writing a review!
No,but that is really good girl and so true. it sounds like your life.!
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What else would i expect from my Queen...Youve melded these random lines into a flowing image filled peice of poetry. Rock on Killer Queen.
MM

great feel to this poem! it really keeps you reading it to the end. =)
-Amber
ps: this is an awesome wonderland!

Somehow it does not seem completely random but you manage to hide that well.

Ahh...first three lines, I could hear some big blues master bellowing away. An interest amaglam of ideas and images, and as always I enjoy the title. Nice work throwing it all together, cutting it and pasting it together with the chorus-like stanza, "Dear Angel of Avalon".