   superficiality 2004-08-22 . chapter 10Hey!
Great story! Nice mystery and twist! I just thought maybe you could make the chapters longer and add more description. Description is always good! Keep writing! |
 sialgunavez 2004-08-18 . chapter 1great story. sorry i'm sort of in a rush, just wanted to leave my mark :) I'll continue reading when i can. |
 Silver Ice 2004-08-13 . chapter 10A very good chapter, as always! ;) That's too bad she had to kill someone though! It's a guilt trip for life! *snap and a half* Good job though and I like how you described the clouds as 'bruised colored'. That was cool! Keep on writing, update soon. |
| Silver Ice 2004-08-11 . chapter 9 Hey! Awesome chapter, I can't wait to see what It'll be like when they finally get to her sisters house. Write more and update soon! |
 Silver Ice 2004-08-01 . chapter 8 Excellent chapter! I'm glad they've decided to go and I hope they make it there. :) Write more! I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep it up and update asap!! |
| Silver Ice 2004-07-28 . chapter 7 Oh that's so sad! Now she knows that everyone died. I hope she goes to Laura and her son Mike!! That'd be so sad if the little boy died too. Update soon! :) |
| Silver Ice 2004-07-27 . chapter 6 Oh my, I'm probably more curious than Sally to see what's in that letter!! Hopefully the news isn't all that bad. Excellent chapter! I can't wait for the seventh one. |
 nick-wordsmith 2004-07-26 . chapter 5Nice new instalment. Thankyou for the mention. By the way have you read anything by me? |
| Silver Ice 2004-07-26 . chapter 5 *gasp* Who's the guy in the corner! Oh my goodnessness! Excellent chapter though and I like the fact that Sally's still in Lenton. Very good touch. I can't wait for the next installment. :) Keep on writing! |
| Silver Ice 2004-07-24 . chapter 4 Oh no! Poor Ben, that's so sad. I like the touch of a daughter though, that makes it seem like he lived on. :) At least that's good. I'm interested to read more of this story! I hope you update soon because it's really excellent already. :) Happy writing. |
| Silver Ice 2004-07-24 . chapter 3 Aw I think Ben and Sally would be so cute together. I hope they make it to Lenton though! This chapter is done very well. |
| Silver Ice 2004-07-24 . chapter 2 A very good chapter! I can't believe they have to do four days of walking, I would fall down after the second day. :) Can't wait to read more. |
| Silver Ice 2004-07-24 . chapter 1 Girl! This is a very good first chapter. I'm wondering who 'I' is. Can't wait to read on. :) |
| nick-wordsmith 2004-07-12 . chapter 4 A very confused chapter, yet still good. |
| nick-wordsmith 2004-07-11 . chapter 3 A good new chapter. Keep at it. U might want to separate the speach lines though.
Eh, ca va la vache? |
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