Love the last stanza. For some reason it reminded me of an episode from Carnivale. LOVELY!

Beautiful verses...so emotional and such sorrowful imagery...*tear* It gives off the feeling of hopelessness and barreness of the soul that fell from grace...hm...reminds me of Sephiroth from Final Fantasy VII...O.O

The lack of sense makes it work! Great stuff.
Stones decay, words last
Nick

That was beautifull. Very well written. I loved the imagery that it gave. The second stanza brought out this image of someone just sitting on the ground coughing up the ash and dirt while they are all grimy and dirty and just laying there all sad. very nice *gives you a cookie*

It does hold many contradicitons, but in a strange way it makes perfect sense.
The poem itself is wonderful... almost apathetic and empty.

Its so pretty.
I love this one, and I don't normally say that about all the poems, but I do yours.
Thats 'cause they all rock.
This one was pretty, and it had this dark tinge that made me go "ooh!"

aww! ::hugs:: I wuv you! XD

Sure it makes sense. To me, at least, in a remote, poetic kind of way, which gives a great effect anyway.
Nice poem. I looked at some of your other stuff and it's all amazing.