Very nicely worded. I really like the depiction of a fracture, not quite broken, but so so close. Very good.

Impressive. Your songs are filled with the love of god, and that is amazing. You care for him, and writing a song about it tell him that you love him. Very impressive. Have you ever thought about writing songs perfessionaly? You should if you haven't.

i really wish my friend could read these lyrics and hear this song... it's exactly what she needs right now. good job.

I like it! Such a cool way to put it I think. It sounds like you've been writing songs for awhile. God bless!