THis is really good! You should write more!

JLB

Hm, it's pretty good, but what is it about?

Hey this is awesome! You should write more!Mouse

Hey I forgot about this story... I like it...well keep writning it.I know you are still writing your other story. but you can write to at a time can't you?brit

i can not find anything wrong with these you are so god you can really you 2morrow.

jazie

great so far. very intertaining to read. especially the beginning in the dream. It was like a play- you described everything so well and I could picture it in my head. I hope you continue this and I'll keep track!

This story stinks! You need to write more! You bugger twit! Actually, twit is a verb, so it can't be used as an adjective, but hey! You're my sister, so I can say whatever I want. he he he, no i love , u better write more soon!

Aw! Come on! I really like this one! Are you ever going to write the next chapter! Your characters are so well-developed in this one and I love the relationship between Freemont and Clover, it reminds me of me and MY brother. lol.
PLEASE UPDATE THIS ONE ASAP!

*squeels in delight* ok, I MUST say that this is your best work yet! I love it! UPDATE SOON!

Freemont sounds like a hottie! He's mine.

very nice story, looking forward to it

Great beginning! Can't wait to see what happens next. Watch your verb tenses tho and the dialogue became a little confusing towards the end. Nice work!