I like that one too. I like how it is broken up by the repetitions. Maybe they repeat themselves for too long but it makes a great ending!

I liked this song alot, its interestingly structured, and I think it works well. Some very beautiful verse's short and sweet. Keep up the good work
I rate this song: 7.9/10

This is beautiful, and I can perfectly relate at the moment. For a poem the repetitions might be a bit too much, but since it is a song, and the words repeated are really important to the message of the poem, it works fine here. I'd love to hear that performed by a band. ;-) Like it very much, especially the first two stanzas.