very nicely writen, beautifully compelling though i would have suggested highlighting the 'voice' in italics for proper separtion. very intriguing, two thumbs up!

Wow this is awesome stuff! Touched me deep with how you've written it

Well, compared to your other stories it's average, but that doesn't mean it's a bad work on the whole. Several reviewers say "there's just something wrong about it" and I agree. I think the problem is that the writing is a little forced, perhaps even stiff. The repetition of "sir knight" and the second-person point of view were unique and emotional at first, but I got tired of them easily.

The good news is, this is original. Even the authors who don't have the common fantasy cliches still sometimes write the same story every time, but this is a different enough theme from your other stories to be interesting and surprising at times. I also liked the narrarator, whoever she was, and her (?) nasty tone of voice. It might have been interesting to learn why she told that story to the knight, but don't put it in if it sounds awkward.

I have only one word...Kudos. I only hope that my work will get this level of emotion out of the reader.

Nive. Very nice.

WOw. This is good! You're one hell of a writer you know that? This is a cool way of writing a story! I mean, as far as i know, i've never seen anyone who writes like this! Plus, you're reading R.A Salvatore too aren't you? With references to a drow. ANyway, all in all, an awesome story which is well written! I salute you!

Hey- your very good with emotional fiction. This story got my interest quick.

that was absolutely amazing. again and again I am stunned by your talent to invoke such strange emotions in your readers. congratulations, i am fully in awe.

Hello again, Werecat! I hope life has been treating you well. ^_^
I think, out of all your stories that I have read thus far, this one has been my least favorite. I can't really explain why, since it's written in that same beautiful, disturbing voice that you always use . . . it just didn't strike me as much I guess. However, that is not to say it's not good! ^_^ I like it well enough to leave a review.
As usual, since I'm coming in late here, I may be repeating things others have already said - if so, I apologize in advance. ^_^
[She shared a life with you, despite your long absences and long silences, with not one word of {complaint.}]
[In any case, her mother had used all means {at} her disposal] - OR - [in {her power} to cause a miscarriage] ~ That's a little nitpicky, but the way it's written just doesn't sound quite right. ^_~ Your choice, of course.
[Did you finally {step} inside her cell?]
Gosh, I think the most compelling literary tool you used in this piece is the second person POV. In a longer story, the device would trip and fall flat, but in this, it is extremely eerie. ^_^ Excellent work as always, lady!
~ LoK

You have a wide vocabulary. Very good. Wide vocabularies make stories so much more original. ^^ Also the choice of words is appropriate and makes the story much more suspenful. i like it. ^^

All I can say is wow. Well actually I can say more and here goes - I was just browsing through thie site when I stumbled onto your Constructive criticism essay. Finding it very informative and useful, I wondered if perhaps your stories were of the same standard. They were better. This is a great piece and it shows that you are a talented writer. I liked how wrote in second person and maintained an interesting and powerful story. I can honestly say I found nothing wrong with it, quite an achievement for me, and this will certainly be going to my favourites. (Your art is exceptional too.)

amazing, what can i say? it flows with such a uniqueness, starts and ends with such longing, you can almost taste the longing of the soldier as he thirsts for her, an endless thirst. Reminds me of myself. and how much i LOVE to read your work. :S I think i'm going mad! great job, ps. spell check doesnt revise errors of grammer. Remember to go over your work once with spell check and then again manually so that you havent missed anything. Sometimes time consuming, but never a waste.

I'm sorry I haven't been around to 'R&R', as it were; quite a few additions have been made to the list of posted stories, and I've been meaning to read them for a long time. ^^;
However, I did read this more than a week ago; I haven't review until now because I was not entirely certain about how to say what I want to say.
In brief, it's an absolutely wonderful story, despite the dark overtones present from beginning to end. The first two paragraphs caught my attention and caged it; I don't think I could have looked away even if the cats came calling for food - and, as in most cat houses, that's certainly saying something. The writing is charged with images and a sense of bitter recollection; I _had_ to keep reading, to find out why.
The use of the second person also drew my interest from the start. It's so rarely used - or at least so rarely used to any pleasing effect - that I was stunned to see it here, written with elegance and purpose. To think that all of these harsh feelings are mine drew me even further into the imagery; I felt like a part of the story on from the very first line.
The knight's - my? - guilt is introduced smoothly; it's there, but I can't be sure why at first. Then the half-drow stalks forward and shows herself. I loved the fact that the knight acknowledged her essential plainness - she is not a typical "fair maiden" at all - and still was obsessed with her. That he hid this obsession and still was tainted by it - was still driven to go against his sense of honour in perhaps every way possible - is a painful irony, expressed with bleak but lovely words.
I adore this piece. It's just so powerful, so vivid. Once again, I'm in awe of your ability to tell a dark tale. ^_^

You have really created another amazing masterpeice. It should be published. So many wish for your talent.

Definately adore this one. I wasn't sure where it was going at first, but it was a morbidly pleasant surprise. *grins*